Broken Umbrella

by Baby Rainbow   Oct 20, 2015


Like a broken umbrella,
she became useless for this life
where rain suddenly turns
into a constant waterfall.

Lost in so many ways,
out in the darkness
of heartache and misery,
in the blustering wind
without a guide.

A blunt knife
trying to cut out
the confusion in her mind.

Busy making plans
on leaving this world
for the last time,
waiting for her dreams
to come at night,
only to beg them to stop.

So many walls
she thought she could climb,
but like a broken umbrella,
she became useless
for this life.

Saffie
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  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Love the first stanza and the simile used "like a broken umbrella" - the idea of a flapping, useless umbrella/person being battered by the unrelenting weather.

    It becomes more personal in the second stanza by telling the reader how this person is "lost in so many ways" - the metaphor of the umbrella eased up on here which gives us a very definite person to relate to.

    Then the idea of "busily making plans" to leave the world - shocking but excellently written all at once, Saffie - I loved that line. And the sad truth behind wanting your dreams to cease.

    And then the metaphor heavy (but still personal ) last stanza - she thought she could climb life's "walls" but "like a useless umbrella" she wasn't fit for the job.

    A sad write with some very powerful little lines in it.
    All the best
    Ben

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