Comments : Love lines

  • 9 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Hi Prince Alexander! (what a great name!)

    I like your poem a lot! This is a good piece of writing!

    Please forgive me, I added some suggested small changes just to make it flow a little better. Hope you approve.

    'Your eyes are tender but your look has tease.
    You've been created to beckon, to beckon and please.
    You are an earthly creature, but I would sell for you my soul,
    And would betray Almighty God, no fear of paying a toll.
    My actions are no longer ruled and judged by any reason,
    For Love lies high above religion, and worth the blasphemy for treason.'

    • 9 years ago

      by Princealexander

      Hi Peter.
      I appreciate your kind words and will think about your suggestions.
      Obviously my pseudonym assumes more than I really am ... :-)
      Cheers,
      AP