Comments : I love you

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a lovely poem and one I fully relate to and understand: we have become lost in a world of virtual nonsense, forgetting the here and now, no one able to just put their Bloody phones down for a second! I don't even have one anymore, I'm that sick of them, lol.
    My only suggestion would be to break this up into more readable "chunks". Stanzas for instance. It would make it more appealing to people clicking onto your piece.
    Aside from that, it's an excellent piece. Well done and all the best
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Yrene

      Thank you so much for appreciating my poem. I will try to break them down to stanzas. :)

  • 9 years ago

    by J Nair

    Dear ShYerne,

    Its a lovely, sensible and honest poem.
    With your permission i would love to share it with my kids. They really need to see what sharing love is all about. How the current trend is clearly giving away the most humane sensation of sharing the warmth of nearnes and enjoying the company and living life in the real sense. the message is so clear-for once stay away from these cold gadgets and surrender to your natural element.

    Thank you.

    • 8 years ago

      by Yrene

      Yes of course.. please share it with your kids. Thank you so much for appreciating my poem.