Comments : Can't hold it down.

  • 9 years ago

    by zabetha

    Damn, this is a good poem.

  • 9 years ago

    by Athanael

    Beautiful....

    "so quit asking me to
    imprison the pain and
    improve myself,
    like an insomniac cured
    of sleeplessness with an
    angel's kiss."

    And that part is just breathtaking...

  • 9 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Hi MaryAnne,

    It is so good you have this outlet, just imagine if you could not write!

    Sometimes taking your distance, literally and emotionally, even of it is just for a few days, can make you see things more clearly.

    If you truly love someone, then that feeling will surface once you are alone. If you don't, then you will feel a huge sense of relief once you have managed to get away, or go into a new direction, as you called it in your poem.

    You deserve to have the best. Dare and investigate if he is that to you, you won't regret it. Sometimes, after you have closed one door, a new one opens with a person that makes you happy and just happy, no other conflicting emotions attached.

    Keep writing until it is out of your system, ok?

    Love and a big hug,

    Ingrid

  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    ~like an insomniac cured
    of sleeplessness with an
    angel's kiss.

    ^^^sighs

  • 9 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Maryanne this is a epic write . Love where this poem stems from, I love that quote. Your opening stanza is awesome with the fire that you're trying to smother the demon with ...I loved what you did there.

    I'm not running if I point
    my heart in a new direction,
    if I learn a new way of life...

    ^^ I loved this! Ugh, self motivation, justifying what's actually happening ---> running. We always look for an excuse.

    This was great, I miss your work and it felt good to read again.