by Ingrid
That bad, eh, Larry? ;0) |
Yes, Larry! Love this. Your voice and style in this made me smile. Great use of the word list and flow. Coffee = love right? |
Only if love brings the coffee. |
by Mr. Darcy
Hello Larry, |
And I am drinking one while reading your comment. |
Truly an upbeat little daddy you have created in this challenge. Definitely gotta have my coffee. Your poem intrigues me as to wondering your intent with the direction your last stanza leads to an innuendo of the age old tale of a young man will love you if you "do something of favor". Seems you took it in a direction of older and wiser that your iust now comes from a bean rather than a woman. Lol gotta love it regardless of the intent. Awesome job and thank you for entering contest. |
Lol, I actually got it from my kids. They constantly are saying things like "if you do this for me I'll love you forever." |
by BlueJay
I think your piece is the first one in this contest to have been purely humorous, but then again you tend to write funny pieces quite often so maybe it was to be expected. |
Thanks, Maddie. I'm glad you said that. I felt there was something wrong but could not put my finger on it. |
by BlueJay
Much better flow, at least in my opinion. Nicely revised. :) |
Thanks! |
by Dark Secrets
Wow... loved this poem Larry! |