by BlueJay
In the first line of the second stanza, "...touch such toxic again" it feels like you need another word like "Touch something so toxic" or "touch such a toxic" unless you did it for creative effect, which I'm all for, but purely from a grammar perspective, it is missing something. |
by Bob Shank
I would have been blown away if the last line to this would have been |
by Saerelune
Thank you for the suggestions, both of you! |
by Cindy
Congratulations on your win. |