Tainted, forgotten
by Tommy Nov 7, 2015
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Young, sweethearts |
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8 years agoby Em
Tommy,
Such a heartfelt piece, full of raw emotion. Many of us have been broken-hearted and could probably relate to this. I feel this is based on some real life events of heartache and hurt and obvious ending of a relationship that meant a lot to you
The rhythm and syllabic count me the piece flow very smooth.
Well done, Em-
8 years ago
by Tommy
Thank you for the kind words! Yes this is based off of an 8 year relationship that ended. I usually physically write all my poems down but will be typing them on here so there are things to look forward too.
Thank you for taking the time to read.
Tommy
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8 years ago
by Maple Tree
Tommy,
I really like the format of this piece, along with the flow and rhythm of your rhyme scheme.
This reads like a broken heart's rant or rap and I think it's beautifully and tastefully done.
Starting with the beginning stages of a love, ending with the sorrowful feelings at the end of the relationship.
Just a very powerful write, thank you for sharing!-
8 years ago
by Tommy
Thank you for the kind words! Let's just say that had 8 years in the making and was truly heartfelt
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