Awesome illugy... wait... what's that word, not metaphor but euphanism??? i can't remember, either way, great poem.

Love pulls us all out of that fierce independent stance.
Love the subtlety, much better than spelling out the ending. Or perhaps, the beginning of something else.

This really is a very well written piece of poetry and I love the way you have finished it with the repetition of "and then you".

Great write. All the best,
Ben

I'm really sad that I hadn't read this poem sooner.. I'm always such a fan of your work and feel so inspired when I read your words.

"i had the structure of science and thought"

this... this is beautiful. Also love the lowercase i's, as though you're not truly the subject - which is later confirmed. Beautiful imagery and all that poetic stuff, of course, but the emotions of a poem, that's what draws me in, and this is oozing with it.

I love you.