Gift

Love the imagery your words leave in ones mind, and in such short verses as well.
Good work!

No problem Jay - love the new edit. As Ingrid alluded to, and a wonderful writer called Mr Darcy (Michael) advised me - you can use the title as a sneaky fourth line, so make it different from the rest of the poem - don't give too much away too soon.

All the very best,
Ben

Bless You Ingrid :) thank you so much. So I will just go ahead and edit the poem then.
I really appreciate your taking time and explaining this to me.

Thank you.
Jay.

Jay - I have just read Ingrid's comment - listen to her; she has far greater knowledge of this form (and every other form ) than I do!

No problem , Jay - it took me a while. They are similar to senryu (5,7,5) syllable count but haiku tend to deal with nature. What about this:

Impartial droplets
Leave their heavenly abode
Blessing all around.

(5,7,5 so 17 in all)