Comments : See you again

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Peter,

    Welcome to P&Q.

    I like the feel of this poem. You have poured your heart out. I like the simille of the flower. Beautiful indeed.

    There are a few typos, but that didn't distract me from seeing the honesty on the page. I look forward to seeing more work from you.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 8 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Love is a wonderful feeling and she was your flower. She left and you don't know why but she has a special place in your heart. Thank you for sharing. Take care

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A lovely write, Peter and as Mr Darcy (Michael) says, you have poured your heart out with honesty here.
    All the very best,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Hellon

    I'm surprise that, of the comments you've receive so far, no one has corrected your little spelling errors. Yes, I can see English will not be your first language but...the errors are very minor and will take seconds to correct, making the poem better....the content is fine BTW :)

    To me my love,
    a beutiful flower you were. *beautiful*
    i liked the way you leaned on my shoulders,
    with your arm round my waist. *Capitalize the I here*

    all i craved for was a smile *and again with the I*
    just to stare at your dimples.
    but....

    without a bye you went
    where to? av no idea *I've*
    giving me sleeples nights *sleepless*
    and in my heart,
    a wound never to heel *heal*

    i still love you and *I*
    can't hide the feelings
    but dear,when
    will i see you again? *I*

  • 8 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I liked the emotion of your poem and as said by others favourite part for me also is the idea of your beautiful flower leaning on your shoulder.