Comments : Mont View Hotel

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    The world is alone without you;
    no wine-sparkled eyes dance toward me
    a'lilt with fresh new adventures,
    so there's no pleasure
    traveling lonely rooms.

    ^^I kept going back to the title and as I read the opening stanza it gave me the impression of a lady whom you had fond memories of in this place but then I see it as a description of the hotel itself!

    In every way its right the world is alone without hotels, they are that open arms for a lost soul the one who doesn't question but just allows us to sleep in her arms.

    The further description keeps bringing on an image of a woman but that woman is a hotel-the sounds, environment, its colors is like a special place to be in.
    Maybe I'm wrong but that is my overall impression...there is a longing for this place maybe a memory which keeps visiting you in this place.

    I'm not sure if my comment made any sense to you because after reading what I typed it feels senseless!

    • 8 years ago

      by Larry Chamberlin

      This was written during my first marriage, before things went South. It was night at a hotel in the Napa Valley, in their giant Jacuzzi, with flirtatious women and lots of wine and cheese being shared. I missed my wife terribly and wrote this when I returned to my room - alone.

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Larry
    What a sad piece you have penned. You can feel your loneliness in the words you wrote. Great metaphors.

    No shadow of the evening shares
    your rose-down deep eyed glow.

    ^^^^^
    Really loved these lines.

    Take care
    Cindy