Smoke & Mirrors (Double Tetractys)

by Mr. Darcy   Jan 18, 2016


Smoke
Blinded
my blinkered,
puppy dog heart.
The noose you kept me on surely tightened
the day your lightening ruptured my soul:
Breathless laughter
Drew me to...
You with
Him.

michael
2016

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* Inspired by Maple Tree's recent and most excellent double Tetractys*

Tetractys

Tetractys consists of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20). Tetractys can be written with more than one verse, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count. Tetractys can also be reversed and written 10, 4, 3, 2, 1.

Double Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1

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  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Michael I love dark poetry. This one is great. Nice job on the form.
    Take care
    Cindy
    ~ hugs~

  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Clever wording here Michael, and yes some cuckolding inferences?! lol!
    Seriously, nice work.

    • 8 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      We would loose so much creative material if it was not for 'cuckolding' lol
      Thanks for taking time to read my efforts.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I keep telling Ingrid but she never listens so I will try to persuade you to do the right thing and stop making up forms, Michael. I could almost accept it, but you seem to be laying the blame at Andrea's feet for some twisted idea of what you call inspiration......:)
    IN ALL SERIOUSNESS.......wonderful, disciplined writing from you here, Michael. I have done enough research to know how difficult this form is and you have done a great job here, and kept the story rigid. Have you been made a cuckold again, Michael? Leave her, man.
    Wonderful - you've hit a purple patch today!
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Lovely comment Ben. To be honest sometimes it's just fun to just have a go. Back to work tomorrow, so it'll be the 'Q' word from me! lol

      Thanks Ben.

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Thank you Andrea, I will amend the typo right away!

  • 8 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Awesome! Im happy I inspired you Michael!

    This is wonderful.... sad and in depth .... wonderful!!

    (small type perhaps? rupture = ruptured ?)

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