Space Oddity (Cinquain)

by Mr. Darcy   Jan 18, 2016


Shooting
Stars burn their tears
across a sequined baize.
Major Tom waves farewell from his
Tin can.

michael
2016

A cinquain poem is a verse of five lines that do not rhyme. The cinquain poem was created by Adelaide Crapsey.
A cinquain consists of 5 unrhymed lines.

Each line has a set number of syllables see below:

Line 1 - 2 syllables
Line 2 - 4 Syllables
Line 3 - 6 Syllables
Line 4 - 8 syllables
Line 5 - 2 Syllables

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  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Michael what a beautiful tribute to Bowie...I was young when he was popular we had 1 radio to share with 3 girls....Debbie usually won the radio....so it was Casey Cason top 20 during the week and top 100 on the weekend so if he was on their I heard him...lol...I do remember some of his songs.
    Great job on this!
    Take care
    Cindy
    *hugs

  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    'Shooting Stars burn their tears across a sequined baize.'

    What a great line Michael! You have surpassed yourself just with this line!
    Wish I had thought of that one!
    Good work!

    • 8 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Sorry Peter I have a Copywrite on that particular line. Lol
      You can have this one instead: those who cant see shouldnt drive. :0)

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I was listening to 'Space Oddity' and when I heard the simile of a 'tin can' rocket reference I knew I had to use it.

    I think I am Bowie'd out.. for now! lol

    Thanks again.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Major Tom was probably my favourite song of his, although he had many marvellous ones, didn't he?
    You have it spot on with those last two lines, Michael ; I'm welling up!
    All the very best,
    Ben

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