Comments : PRAYERS TO THE RAIN

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    a nice little poem here:

    Crystal tears of sky,
    ^
    I like the image of rain filled sky. Also the metaphor of big emotion: a sky full of emotion.

    Cluster of desolate truth.
    ^
    In this sky a loneliness brought on by a revelation. This line is nicely weighted.

    Lave drought surrounding the earth;
    ^
    Is the word 'Lave' a typo for 'Love'? If so the idea of this desolate raw emotion is starving the emotion of love, preventing it from being released.

    Drench me by your catharsis.
    ^
    A lovely last line. A plea to the heavens to purge this pity with cleansing rain.

    Well done an enjoyable read.

    Take care,

    Michael