Hello,

there is a sweet sadness which is accentuated by the refrain. I have seen refrains over used and they can be distracting - I know I have written them. You however have balanced them with clear descriptive language of unreachable love: a shadow that is always close, yet remains always out of reach. What a tease eh?

Well done on this write. I liked it a lot.

Take care,

Michael

I could so relate to this poem, and I think it was captured quite vividly how real a dream can seem when first awakening and how sad it can leave you when you come back to reality, especially if it has been about a lost loved one.

Lovely layout and flow to this poem, I enjoyed the read, and I really like your collision of shadows and dreams.

Your poetry is wonderful every word tugs at my very soul you my angel have a gift

Hi this is powerful and full of emotion

My mind wanders,
with his name on
my heart.
^^
I can imagine and even feel this mans name tattooed on your heart. The memories and the heartache he has caused.

His beautiful voice
clouds my thoughts,
making me dance with
the rhythm of my heart.
^^
I can hear and feel the rhythm of your heart here but feel it's with,sadness.

I scream out his name,
only he doesn't hear
from the distance that
separates us.
^^
The screaming of his name and the distance again brings with it sadness as you are trying to reach someone that you cannot.

I desire his warmth,
and his love.
^^
We all have that desire of someone that we can't have and it hurts.

I am in love with
with a shadow that
can easily disappear.
^^
This is powerful as it seems like it's not a person anymore you are yearning but a thing with saying 'a shadow'..

In my dreams
I see him.
^^
This brings me great sadness you are dreaming.

I see his smile,
and I can hear his
sweet voice.
^^
Why, why, why? When you cannot have it!!! :(

I awake with tears,
knowing it was only a
dream.
^^
I think this is very relatable. I bet many people have woken with tears because they have dreamt something so lovely to find it was only a dream.

A dream that felt so real,
and a dream that held my desires
that I wish would become my reality.
^^
As above.. What did I just say harsh reality and all that? It can really suck amd you put it out there big style :)

I am in love with a shadow
that I cannot see,
a shadow that can easily disappear.
^^
Yes, one that so easily disappears because life is so unfair!!

He is my only love,
and my only desire.

My shadow...
In my dreams.

You write great.

Em