Ha, Michael,

Yup, as a fellow poet I can relate to this well....some songs and poems make it to the lime light, and some don't. I am glad you posted this one:)

We must be grateful for the internet, for providing us with the opportunity to showcase whatever it is we want to let out and have an audience to give us well needed feedback!!! Hooray for the end of publishers and agents being in complete control!

(((hugs))) xx

Michael,
I don't think I'm too far off the mark when I say I know where this one comes from and I understand your frustration completely. I'll leave that there.
A great poem and very cleverly written - again, your knowledge of the forms is evident and also - and more importantly - you ability to execute them so well.
Well done and all the very best,
Ben

Lovely little write and interesting form. I had a study of your rules and I think it seems like a possible candidate for me to attempt (not great with forms) but this one seems easier than some.

The flow really is great, you have done well one that and the rhymes bounce off each other nicely too.

Judging comment:

This is a new form to me, and Michael executed it quite well, a concise but powerful poem. I think everyone can relate this piece!

Judging comment:

This is a new form to me, and Michael executed it quite well, a concise but powerful poem. I think everyone can relate this piece!

A clever poem Mr Darcy, worthy of your pen.
Interesting form and good flow.
Well penned.