Waiting
by Once an Angel Feb 6, 2016
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7 years ago
by mossgirl19
Another wow...what a beautiful heart-gripping piece! A serene feel surrounds the piece....it being kind of choppy as Mark said...only adds to the intensity of the longing the writer has. Great write!
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8 years agoby hiraeth
Judging comment:
The brevity of this piece only helps accentuate the sorrow that the author wishes to convey. It reads a bit choppy, it sounds like a free-verse bordering on a spoken-word piece, each verse is more powerful than the last, until you reach the ending where it hits you like a ton of bricks.-
8 years ago
Thank you for your feedback. Yes, it wasn't intended to follow a particular kind of format. Sometimes writing freely is well, freeing. :)
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8 years ago
by Ben Pickard
This really is a very powerful little piece. I am always in awe of short pieces that can convey so much in so little space. I like, too, that this can be taken multiple ways depending on how the reader views it. Are they lost? Are they dying or simply leaving of their own choice?
Excellent write. All the very best,
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8 years ago
Thank you Ben for reading. I enjoyed your prospective about all the ways this poem could be taken. I appreciate when I can writing something meaningful to me, and also has potential to reach others where they are.
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8 years ago
by Liz
Short, but still managed to make me feel a deep sense of sadness.
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8 years ago
Thank you much for reading. I played with making this poem longer, but in the end this length still felt enough, felt right. I suppose it had a case of the good old "less is more".
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