Comments : Life Like Light

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This has a great little structure; I love how you have started each stanza with a word from the title. It makes them compact and drives your point home well because of it.

    The only suggestion is on the last line. "To empty them OF their worries" not "OFF their worries."

    Great write and all the very best,
    ben