Comments : Chances

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Nice poem..
    Few critiques though
    First stanza: 'I gave you not one but many'.. I think you should have but chances at the end of this.
    And the last line:'now you nothing more to than a rat' I think should be and now you're nothing more to me than a rat or and now you're nothing more than a rat.
    I hope this helps.