Nominated. I love it

Expressive! The power of music, most often claimed to soothe the savage beast, is transformed here to stifle the savaged breast. You are shown here literally losing your "self" in music. First it helps ("chases the dragons of my mind"); then you realize "music cant take away the pain."
[Minor point, cant = can't]
In fact, it appears the emotional content of your pain is exacerbated by the music: "Thunderous waves over my heart / bitter tones that make me smart."
The stifling of emotion is actually enabled by music:
"music takes away my speech / ... / No pain will they ever glean"

Until you have built an impenetrable wall sealing off all intimate discovery, using the metaphor of death - representing the death of spirit and love.
"close my heart and soul / bolster up with heaps of coal / through the shadow of my grave / hear the music glad heavens wave."

Well done and a belated welcome to PnQ.

Congrats on the win Milly

The tone of this reaches my heart. The loss of someone is a shadow we can't ever seem to evade. You expressed so much in this piece and I love how much your words flowed too, especially with the rhyme, didn't feel forced.

Congrats on the win and welcome to PnQ! Please keep writing.

Loss is so painful and by writing we hope it eases the pain somewhat...but loss never leaves or never fades and the pain is always there. I like your usage of words and how each stanza flows and ties itself into the next till the finish. Beautifully sad and beautifully penned.

Congrats on the win

This is beautiful - a really well deserved win

This poem shows great sadness and depth of emotion. Can see why it is a winner

Milly,

This really is beautiful yet very emotional. It gave me goose bumps. There's a sense of serenity and calm within it though and I could feel it because the dead are at rest. It's kind of hard to explain but I felt quite calmed reading this after a busy morning.

Your rhythm is kept throughout which keeps it running smooth.
Congratulations on the win, well deserved. Em

Judges comment

There is a very relatable theme to this piece. We have all had those moments. Milly has put that time to good use and written it down. Lovely use of imagery and scene setting. I like the rhyme although a simplistic scheme it works with the simplicity of the whole piece. Some people may call it raw but I feel it is a little more polished than that. I originally scored this a 7 but switched places with my 10. I would have liked to have seen every line have 8 syllables, there is the odd 7 here and there. However Milly has not suggested that all lines have the same syllable count therefore it would be mean on my behalf to fault it. Poetry, particularly free verse knows no boundaries. 10 points

Beautiful, love it....

Musical, like words, can evoke memories of times past. Good and bad.
Nicely penned write Milly.
PPx

Beautifully written Milly

I especially loved the visual imagery of 'Spirit twirls in circles sink'.

Keep writing

X

Everyone has a song that speaks to them, trudges up memories, gives them strength, or takes it away. Beautiful piece and a well deserved win.

Reading this tugged something in me. Music really is capable of conjuring up memories from even the deepest parts of our past. Like poetry, it also draws us closer together.

I have to say the first stanza is my favourite.

I've a little thinking time tonight so trying to catch up on things and read a little of love, loss, hate and joy for all things are contained within.

So glad I stumbled on this gem by you. The music will always play and sometimes it's a sad melody, yet you can still dance to it.

Craig x

Hi Milly !!! This is such a beautiful poem.. I loved your writing style.. And the sheer rhythm you maintained through out... I aim for the same when I write too.

Music is so deeply personal and it's so hard to explain what certain songs can make a person feel, but that's what you've done here and I love it! Such great imagery! =^.^=

I also really love the first stanza of this poem "chases the dragons of my mind" Love it! As Sampreeth commented the rhythm that is maintained throughout really keeps this poem flowing.

Excellent, I really enjoy your poems

THIS IS A BROAD VISUAL THAT YOU PAINT OF LOSE AND PAIN, HELD THERE WITH WORDS OF WISDOM I ENJOYED READING THIS PIECE GREAT WORK