Comments : I'm sorry

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a pleasing piece of poetry to read and to view - your layout really drew me in and it kept the poem tight and focused.
    A very sad poem and a very sad end - the idea of cleansing your soul with her tears and then saying sorry and being on your way in a sort of dreadful acceptance of the relationship's end.

    My only quibble would be "am sorry" - would it not read better as "I'm sorry"?

    Just my opinion - either way, a great write.
    Take care,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    I think this is the most beautiful piece I have read for awhile. It's so pure and I can picture you doing what you say just so the person knows you're sorry as I can feel the emotion in the piece.
    The only thing I can point out is 'bath' meant to be 'bathe.'