Star struck

by J Nair   Mar 16, 2016


Black skies spread out all around
Lying on the hard ground looking up
Drifting dark clouds move aside and
Millions of stars gleaming bright
Keep popping out one at a time.

Still, like a dead log there I lie
Star Struck!! Gazing at jewel studded skies.
The cool breeze ruffling my hair,
Like the tender touch of someone who cares
Each breath that exits or enters me,
Mocks aloud, "Oh you are still caught up in your cage.
Float out; you need to meet that light".

Tears rolling down my cheeks in sheer relief;
The pleasure, the pain of just watching with delight
A passion that ignites within, this yearning to be a part of the light,
Feel I do, with each missing breath
Making me lighter still.

Like a wisp of smoke will I rise
Floating away on those drifting clouds
Till I melt into the galaxy

All that will be left behind is a residue of star dust
And will greet the dawn in varied forms
As dew drops or as Morning mist .

Jay@April 2014/ modified16.3.16

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  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Jay,

    sorry its taken so long for me to comment.

    I love this piece and I will tell you why...

    Ever since I was small i have wondered up at the nights sky. When I was in my early teens, my friends and I would go to the play park and sit on the swings and look up. We would talk about the speed of light and try and imagine what it would be like if we could go faster than light and reach a far off world; only to then gaze back with super telescopes back at a prehistoric planet Earth.

    I love the stars and the way they make us feel so small; putting us in our place in the solar system, galaxy and wider universe.

    I like the honest description of gushing emotion to majesty that is the night sky.

    A lovely (revised) write.

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 8 years ago

      by J Nair

      Aww Michael, that is so sweet, I can just imagine you as a little boy among your friends discussing time travel and light speed :) I am sure you must have come out with some supper genius idea about transporting your self into space.....

      The beauty of the night sky is... that it lets you spread your imagination and makes you believe in the possibilities of miracles.

      Thank you for sharing your views. Take care

      Jay

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is truly wonderful. Stargazing is a truly magical thing especially when done with someone special. My bedroom is in the loft so I can stargaze each night.

    I saw my first meteor shower last year on holiday and it was awesome.

    You descriptive are truly genious.

    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by J Nair

      Wow !! being able to see the sky lying down in your own bed... really amazing :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the moments you have described here and the feeling it brings out is simply joyful...joy with tears. Its mother nature's beauty which makes us feel so emotional and at the same time love her for her creations. A nice read for the evening :)

    • 8 years ago

      by J Nair

      Thank you Meena.

      I think mother nature manages to awaken the poet in us all.
      :)
      Take care.

      Jay

  • 8 years ago

    by Mayday

    This was amazing, I absolutely love stargazing, the sky is so big and vast and wondrous. It's lovely how you captured this moment - it's wonderful to stop and truly take in this beautiful world we live in, we can really appreciate it then. Beautiful poem. ^__^

    • 8 years ago

      by J Nair

      HI Ailissa,
      Thank you for your comment.

      Indeed it is a pleasure to lie and stare at the stars. Its mesmerizing. I am yet to go watch a meteor shower... i have heard so much about it from friends. It must be divine.

      Take care.
      Jay

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Jay,

    "Star struck" quite literally, by the sound of it. And why shouldn't you be when all of us are simply stardust!

    A lovely write and I appreciate your use of internal rhyme.

    All the very best,
    Ben

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