by Chris Engle Jul 7, 2004
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
I said i love you, |
Love it. |
Hmmm i realy liked it the flow war perfect but the thirs stanza was kinda confuzing but nice job =] 5/5 |
by Leah20
Alright job on the rhyming, overall the poem felt cliched to me, there was nothing special in it to make me differentiate it from the hundreds just like it that I've read in the past(I've written some too). Good start with the rhymes though. There was one time that I thought that the rhyme was a little off in these two stanzas: |
A hearfelt write but I find with rhyming poems they tend to come out a bit forced. Freestyle quite often allows one to let loose and I think this one would grasp the reader better if you didn't have to worry about word selection. Nonetheless a good job! |
by Meme
Really nice poem |