Amanda,

You have your own unique style of writing which makes it really good. This is griping and I wanted more.

"there was the mother who'd wondered off the path to find food for her children
the son who'd been to busy looking for his mother to find the sunset
the older man who'd said goodbye to his wife before forever came
the soldier who'd forgotten himself on the battlefield'
^^^
This is my favourite stanza because it's just moving and the people are to post doing other things to look for the beauty of life that it goes which is happening sat to often nowadays unfortunately.

I like your style, it's smooth and sophisticated. Em