Michael,
Your words are like a soft breeze whispering such beauty in my ears. Powerful and emotional, left me with Goosebumps.
My heart is deserted
without the grace of your
presence.
Unable to cleanse the
scent of your tender
essence.
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Great opening stanza, shows that you have been heart broken. The words you use show this was a long relationship because you cannot cleanse their scent, the memories and it's hard to when their was such good times.
The lonely silence
broken by your voice in my
mind.
An unwanted vacancy you left
behind.
^^^
This is powerful. The imagery.. I can see you standing their going mas because of the voice, her voice in your head keeping you from carrying on like most lovers. You are now (vacant) empty because she has left yet the voices say otherwise. Nicely done.
A wilting sunflower, I stand lame
without the warmth of your
beam.
My petals weep tears
down a drying
stream.
^^^
I like how the sunflower is representing you here somewhat wilting because of lost love. The sunflower wilting because it has no sun and you wilting because you have no warmth from your love. The metaphors in this stanza are amazing, you use them well. The petals weeping like you would for a lover that has gone.
I yearn for your river
to flow back and
nourish.
Your gentle glimmer
for my heart to
flourish.
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This stanza I like the most as you cannot go on without your lady by your side. The river representing love.
Wow! Em, how amazing you have read my poem as it's written. Lovely for you to take the time and gently break down and spot on with my emotions expressed in my poem. Thank you kindly