Comments : Lost Boy

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Ren

    Writers block? Really? This is wonderful. The imagery and flow throughout is marvellous and makes the poem a joy to read.
    I love how you've given the feeling of not belonging and wanting to escape such an original twist - I too would love to disappear to Neverland sometimes!
    The category that this is placed in is not lost on me either - the wish to escape and the feeling of not belonging is very real for a lot of people....unfortunately, there isn't really a Neverland to escape to.

    Take care and all the best Ren

    ps I will nominate this when my votes are charged.

    • 8 years ago

      by Ren

      Hey Ben!!
      It's great to hear from you.
      Many many thanks for reading and your kind words. I appreciate it so much!
      Still in a bit of a writers block but had a moment of inspiration with this one. It's actually been marinating in my phone for awhile but finally found the motivation and inspiration to finish it.
      Disappearing to Neverland would be quite the blissful escape.
      Thank you once again for reading and for the nomination :) you just made my day.

      Take care Ben!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Ren,

    This is excellent and I feel the flow of the piece is a smooth one. Many people would love to escape to that Neverland but it's unfortunately only in our dreams.
    Your imagery is wonderful, I can imagine floating through the sky just to get to Neverland for one day lol
    A joy to read.

    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Ren

      Hi Em!!
      Thank you so much for reading and for your wonderful comment! I'm glad you could imagine floating through the sky to get there :)
      It is a great escape, even if it's only in our dreams.
      Thank you again!
      Take care :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    This wonderful write is packed with great emotions of melancholy as well as cheerfulness. Your expression as a lost boy is just terrific, totally matching with the reality. Being lost in this colossal world is really quite frightening.

    Very nicely written. 5/5

    • 8 years ago

      by Ren

      Thank you very much! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment :)
      Take care!

  • 7 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Just found this, I love this kinda thing. What a refreshing read

    Regards

    Craig

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so much Craig!

  • 7 years ago

    by Mayday

    I've got goosebumps all over. I loved this. It's sad and it's bittersweet, don't you think? I think you wrote this beautifully ^_^

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so very much! I truly appreciate your kind comment! :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Lost One

    Think I may have been born a lost boy, never been to Neverland though. Thank you for trip, I sincerely enjoyed the short vacation.

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Well then you're absolutely welcome! Glad you enjoyed the trip :) thank you so much for reading and commenting!!

  • 7 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Ren this is an awesome write!! Really this is so absorbing and magical, great word choice and I like the way your rhymes flow.

    Awesome job!

    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so much Ben!!! I really appreciate your wonderful comment :) I'm glad you enjoyed this.

  • 7 years ago

    by Alec

    For you can't be Lost
    If you're Lost together
    With you're brothers
    Lost Boys Forever!

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Hahaha that's awesome, thank you so much, fellow Lost Boy :) I'm glad you enjoyed it!

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    I hope I can come to Neverland too! This is breathtaking, Cowgirl! So excellently told. You rock!

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Absolutely dear Lady! Fellow Lost Boys are always welcome :) thank you so much for reading and commenting!! You rock!

  • 7 years ago

    by Sai

    I love poetry that takes inspiration from the classic fairytales. Well done on the rhyme scheme as well.

    • 7 years ago

      by Ren

      Thank you so much! Your comment is truly appreciated! :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Thungchio Kithan

    fairytale is my thing I like it

    • 6 years ago

      by Ren

      Thanks so much!