Hello Hellon,

I love the form. It seems this poem from 2008 has a style that I have appreciated and used many times recently. It works well to hold a readers interest, the short lines, the use of punctuation, the spacing, the rhyme, dialogue and CAPITAL letters.

The fear is well described throughout, screaming, Zombies, green eyes, trembling fingers, I could go on...

I think the fear of needles is a common one, so adding this to the general fear in this piece adds value. I must admit, I am unsure what the poem is about. Is it about needle phobia, a tattoo parlor, or perhaps confused identity of some description?

Anyway, I love the tension and the way you lead the reader to 'The Needle...' trailing off suggest more to be said, but what...

Take care,

Michael

Love this. The descriptions are wonderfully done, the imagery, the form itself.. Just everything about it. The fear really shines through.
Em

Hi hello

Gotta say this is a killer write, i love how it looks and your vocabulary is perfect, I think alot of people can identify with it and I jist love your "voice" in it.

I wish I could've nominated this.

Ben