Comments : Losing Ground

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    This is so sad, beautifully done. I love the references to the rain and the coffin. It won't always be raining...

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello

    As Brenda says, this is sad but well done. There's some good use of slant rhyme here too, particularly 'coffin' and 'often'

    Well done and all the best,
    Ben