By the Sea (Monoku)

by GB   Apr 27, 2016


By the Sea

Moonlight serenade - two mermaids dreaming.

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**Monoku: is a one line horizontal westernised English language haiku style poem. Usually contains much fewer than seventeen syllables.

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  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Beautiful, GB!

  • 8 years ago

    by Acoustic Odyssey

    Just when I think you can't out due yourself, you prove me wrong...yet again lol. And with that said 10 syllables of pure picturesque wonderfulness!! Almost reminds me of the little mermaid.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Samia, you have written a beautiful piece of poetry in less than 17 syllables, I take my hat off to you. This is something I hadnt heard of before so thank you.

    Fabulous, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Samia,

    This is truly beautiful and the form fascinated me as (guess what) I hadn't heard of it BUT I know of - and have written - haiku. I am also aware that, despite contrary belief, haiku/senryu do not HAVE to have 17 syllables - 17 or less I think is acceptable.
    Anyway. How you have made 10 syllables so beautiful and such a pleasure to read is beyond me....but you have!

    All the very best,
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by GB

      Thank you, Ben :)

      I think this variation was introduced by "Marlene Mountain", still the original Japanese structure would always be the finest.

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    This is just lovely-what a neat poem

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