Just a... (Contest - Water prompt)

by Mr. Darcy   Apr 30, 2016


Drop of life. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . high

~~~Within a~~~ . . . . . . . . . . . .p
Cumulonimbus cloud way. . .. u

in a azure sky
my ice feathered
form
f
..l
...u
.t
.....t
..e
r
...s
Along with,
my brothers (and sisters too)
we merge, we become
DENSE
&

d
e
c
e
n
d

The air is light
the view, a
magnificent
sight.

Me, we, all of us
^
Family,
One and all
~~Drift~~
....d
....o
....w
....n

{{rotating}}
s-l-o-w-l-y
l-o-w-l-y-s
o-w-l-y-s-l
w-l-y-s-l-o
^
In a wee bit
~~of a~~
Dizzy state

~spinning~
until
frozen forms
warm -
transform...

It's a thought,
you know,
but we are
actually...

harnessing
The miracle of
----LIFE----
That's in:
Crystal clear
~WATER~
Reflective
-----like a
Mirror rorriM
-----like a
Glance into
the past,
to where we
could not

-stop-
For we were not...

Back to
-start-

Back to
the-very
---1st---
~drop~

michael
2016

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  • 8 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I was tempted to vote for this one. After reading it many times, I ended up being confused. I was not sure if my interpretation of the poem was due to the poem itself, or if like most of the times, my intepretation is solely on what is already ingrain in me at the moment of reading.

    But the poem reminded me of a thought I had when I read one of ddavidds poems-
    My thought was:
    One drop, two drops, tree drops.... make an ocean. Most likely I was reading your poem in a religious way.

    After reading it again, I can see the journey that one drop undertakes.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Michael

    This got my vote, not least because we have been teaching my youngest the water cycle recently!
    Aside from that, it really is a rather good little piece of writing that displays your usual brilliant and creative flair.
    All the best and take care,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Michael I loved this when I first read it but that competition was so hard to vote on all those poems were truly magical in there own ways.

    I love the structure of this from first drop to last. You write about that cycle perfectly.

    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Rsan

    The diction here is just perfect..The tiny here and there ryhming splendid..And the imagery is at its all best...Never have I seen a painted poem at its finest as this;-)
    What a mega writing.. I definitely enjoyed this...Unique and beautiful'

    • 8 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you for your comment. Its great to know you liked it a lot.

      Take care Rsan

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