A silent storm

by Dagmar Wilson   May 4, 2016


It's a sadness so intense
a loneliness deep insight the heart,
you can't see it coming.

How do you fix what's broken inside
by judging the mood I am in,
it's like a storm without any fair warning
ripping your days apart.

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  • 8 years ago

    by stormingdance (Lessa)

    Beautiful and expressive! Thanks for sharing. 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Dagmar,

    I like poems that use the silence to emphasis the noise. Like a bitter sweet moment, or being blind to what is clearly in view.

    Loneliness holds a silence that is deeply etched with sadness. Humans are social creatures and even if we bravely say, I am happy alone, we don't really mean this. What we mean is: I am happier alone than risking my heart being broken again. Trust at its best allows us to be free with ourselves, whereas broken trust makes us fear with each step we take.
    ^
    This loneliness can create, and this is what I think your poem depicts, a bitterness that is like a boiling pot with lid on, hiding the pent up pain. So if a person unknowingly comes by its like a jack-in-the-box - the lonely pain jumps out and scares the hell out of them - BOO!

    The simile of a storm is apt as they can cloud the brightest day in a blink and take the sunshine away and replace it with a storm.

    Well done Dagmar, a well written write.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 8 years ago

    by Dancing Rivers

    This definitely speaks to me especially today, a beautiful way of summing it up in few words " a silent storm " that's exactly what it is. Great one Dag

    • 8 years ago

      by Dagmar Wilson

      Thank you for your comment I appreciate it

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Dagmar, outstanding write! It's so difficult when someone else is trying to figure you out or thinks they know you that well- no-one really knows the sadness we carry -take care-Brenda

    • 8 years ago

      by Dagmar Wilson

      Thank you Brenda and you are so right. All the best

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Dagmar

    I relate this piece back to depression which is indeed a silent storm and really can feel like it's pulling you apart.
    I particularly like the reference to it being unfair, or not giving 'fair warning'. How very true. It doesn't always seem to have a reason which makes it all the harder to bear; you can, on bad days, simply wake up and feel like this, entirely out of the blue.

    All the best, Dagmar,
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Dagmar Wilson

      Thank you Ben and all the best to you as well

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