Oh I love this! So sweet and so made me laugh just visualizing it. Well done-

Hello, I like the format a lot.

The onomatopoeia words breathe life and a sense of freedom as the fruit escapes; much like the ginger bread man. Alas like life the adventure is cut abruptly short!

Well done.

Michael

Lucero

You are possibly the most weird and wonderful writer on this site who displays constant originality and a real "I will write what I want" kind of mentality that shines through the page.
In all honesty, I don't always know what to make of it, but sometimes your experiments end in brilliance. Originality in art can only come with experimentation and an "I don't care" attitude.
As to this poem. Again, I was left dumbfounded by it upon first read - especially the "nevermind" end (although I laughed constantly throughout) but reading through two or three times, I couldn't help but be impressed.
The layout compliments the piece; the onomatopoeia works well as Michael points out and the "nevermind" end seems to sum this write up nicely - but also, you as a poet: Damn what others think.

Excellent,

Ben

ps - surely, this should be in the funny section? lol

Perfectly unique.

Em

Luce, this is great!
You would certainly not be able to appear on the same circuit as Gallagher, you would have to be careful of his mallet.
But seriously, I had to laugh when I read it. :8-)