Comments : The Awakening

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Wow Hellon, this is so beautifully written as always by you. The structure is perfect for the piece.

    I feel it's about a relationship of some form turning sour where the person cries but then pulls themselves together thinking of the good times and what has past.

    Great write, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Ohhh mercy!!!

    Hellon I love this!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    As beautiful as a blossom.

    I like that way you have decorated this write. I sense that you are searching for the vital thing that will glow up your existence once again. This poem touched my heart. The paint of sadness is making this write unique and outstanding.

    Brilliantly written. Hellon

  • 8 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judge Comment:

    This is so elegant and full of emotion, I cant begin to comment.
    I was blown away by this piece.

    Hellon, penned such a pretty poem.
    Yearning a person or love, that has gone away or may have even passed on, brings such deep emotion to the fore front and when writing it is difficult to etch the words, and she simply amazed me.. true beauty!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This is so eloquently written, Hellon.

    The title captures the sentiment well...we cannot escape that one moment when we realise that what we had is no longer there, no matter how long tried to fool ourselves into thinking it was still there.

    Well done!

    Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by ketaki

    Nice narration