If I took my life tonight

by The Fallen Angel   May 25, 2016


Would I be wrong,
Would I be right,
If I took my life tonight?
I think over and over,
and reach nowhere.
I tried to sleep,
I tried to forget,
but everything comes back,
in a split of second.
They say am ruthless,
and am heartless,
and am tearing them apart.
But I ask them, in my mind-
If they could feel the pain,
and the emptiness in me?
I've always been the stubborn,
and the killjoy of family, they say!
But they never tried to see,
the hollowness in my soul,
and the broken me, who
cry to sleep everyday,
'coz everyone believes
in what they see outside,
and me, I think over and over-
Would I be wrong,
Would I be right,
If I took my life tonight?

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  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is devastatingly relatable.

    I think many of us have felt like giving in but the strength comes when we keep fighting even if it feels like a black hole, a dead end and that its doing round and around in a vicious circle.

    You words though simple are intense and very fitting.

    All the best, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Hi,

    I hope we're not too late... You don't have any Idea how wonderful life is.
    If your family telling you bad things it doesn't mean that they don't like you. maybe it's just their way to push you to become a better person.. communicate with them, maybe you got them the wrong way (misinterpret)..tell them your feelings, and the words they used hurt you.. parents know what's best for their kids.

    if communicating with them didn't work, find a friend to talk with.

    Define the situation,
    Don't let the situation define you.

    I know you are a strong person and you can surpass it all.

    Have a good day

    Gel

    • 8 years ago

      by The Fallen Angel

      It was one darkest moments in my life! I have been through a lot many situations worse than this earlier! And to ease my mind, I always write!!

      Thank you Gel for the concern, though! I have come so far and I have been through hell! Nothing can break me down now! Yea, it's true that i get tired at times and i give in! but later I just rejuvenate and be on my feet! It's Me against the Whole world! :D

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    As Mr Darcy says, it is sad to see an important piece like this that has gone under the radar.
    So many times, we feel like this and put on a show for people who just don't understand what we really feel like. Sometimes, it's because they just don't have the time but often, it's because they just don't want to see the truth.

    Take care,

    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    It is so sad to find this poem without a vote or comment.

    Wondering who would care or notice if ones life was taken is not uncommon, especially if life is emotionally hard. Usually we have close friends and family to turn to, but here there seems to be no one.

    As writers we have a wonderful outlet that allows us a portal for our thoughts.

    Well done for getting this feeling out.

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 8 years ago

      by The Fallen Angel

      Thanks Michael!! It was one of my darkest moments in life!! I didn't know what else to to other than write!