Hello,

This a fantastic rhyming poem full of superb and thought out metaphors.

Well done and take care,

Michael

I agree with everything Michael (Mr Darcy) says.
I write a lot of rhyming poetry but get so caught up with getting the rhyme as close to perfect as I can that the content or figurative language often suffers.

Great piece,

Ben

This is really an interesting write, very good. Almost makes me think of a heroin shoot experience, I may be way off on this, just made me think it was headed that way. I really liked the entire style of this-