Comments : From Blame To Serenity

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Maher, as always a great piece of writing by you. The imagery, descriptions and words all fit perfectly.

    I love the repetition of yours, yours and yours alone. It makes the piece really catchy and good on the eyes. Structure is great too.

    All the best, Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you Em, as always. Glad you enjoyed it :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Hellon

    I don't want to say too much here because I may be totally wrong in what I'm reading...I do tend to reach right into your poems...anyway..my interpretation is that you are questioning your religion and...everything you have been brought up to accept as the norm..but now...you're own thoughts,as an adult, bring questions that you may be afraid to face.....yeah...I'm probably off the planet :)

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Hahaha it's ok, I can see how that interpretation may have come about I guess, but it is very far from the mark.

      In my mind it was about a poor man falling in love with a wealthy woman. He imagined her to be pure and never questioned what she asked him to do, even if it were murder. He did all he could, believing it was pleasing her and leading her to love him back. All the while, she had his heart in one palm and strings in the other. After coming to realise this, he confronts her and asks her to bare witness to what he voluntarily did in her name, for her love and not her wealth.

      She argues back to shift the blame on to him for agreeing to commit to her requests, so he replies back with "Be as inconceivable as you may, but know your shame". "For you is an abode built in honor from the shamelessness of a man" is pretty much him chastising himself for being so blinded by what he now realises was lust and not love, that he paid no mind to the shameless things he did that were all for her benefit.

      Religion did play a small part though, but only in his feeling of guilt at the end:
      Equity: what he thought they would have
      Enmity: what was planted in him
      Ecstasy: what she gave him as incentive
      Apathy: how he felt toward everything except her
      Animosity: the feeling he developed over time
      Envy: what he felt when he would see her with others
      Apostasy: what he felt he committed after looking back at all of the above.

      The rest is pretty straight forward :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Yours, Yours and Yours, is great! Lesson learned, saves a future blame.

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Thanks :)