Comments : Imagine

  • 8 years ago

    by GB

    This is sadly beautiful, flowing smoothly with very elegant, careful wording.
    One suggestion I have here related to the opening,
    ~ sometimes I close my eyes.

    A simple touch can change the mode you set for the poem, nonetheless very adorable read.

    • 7 years ago

      by Mortal Utopia

      Yeah I agree with your suggestion! Thank you so much for your advice! :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Cedricluk, this is truly beautifully written but so so sad. The deeper meaning here (I feel) is live/love whilst you can because we are all heading to the same place and none of us are safe from that fact. We need to live whilst we are alive and tell those we love that we love them before its too late.

    Wonderful, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Lovely theme used well throughout this poem. Eyes see and remember what has been, but also see all the possible futures including the lost ones.

    A good write.

    Take care,

    Michael