by Larry Chamberlin Jun 18, 2016
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
Some of you children must go to the stars |
A perfect change, and it makes the last verse rightfully beautiful now! Thank you! |
I thought it was beautiful, but the word "stuff" really ruined the last verse (for me, at least)! |
I struggled with that. On the one hand the "right stuff" required it, but on the other, it sounded cheesy. Thanks. |
by Em
Larry, this is so beautiful and delicately written. Imagery spot on, rhyming spot on and well my tears flowed having lost a child myself. |
by Maple Tree
Larry, |
by Everlasting
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