Comments : Hate

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hate is like
    incestuous rats
    prolifically breeding
    spreading its disease
    far and wide...

    ^^

    Great and hard-hitting few lines there, Brenda.
    This poem is so relevant to the world we live in right now; it's embarrassing to be human sometimes, isn't it?
    I always hate when people say "we are all the same" - we aren't. We should all accept that we are all different.

    Great write Brenda. Take care,
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Ben. Yeah, there are days when I just cringe about being a human. We can all act so awful. I must feel very strong driving because this is where this was all swirling about. Take care-Brenda

  • 8 years ago

    by GB

    I like the message here, Brenda. Yes we must accept each other and be convinced that "hate" is nothing but a negative power. Excellent read.

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Samia, thank you so much! It is a sad road we travel, especially when driven by hate. People have to worry about being themselves for fear of dying because of it. So much intolerance for each other, I just don't understand it. I hold out hope for us, it's all I have.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Brenda, this is an enthralling, powerful write with a great message that (and I'm not religious) we should love our neighbours because if we look closely we are all the same just in different bodies.

    our children aren't born
    to hate
    we teach them hate
    with our words
    our actions
    against our fellow man
    we hate for their differences
    for how some-one looks
    their beliefs...
    ^^
    This is the most powerful part because I believe it to be true for some people. Very deep. I also love the reference to rats.

    Fantastic write, nominated.
    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Em! I really appreciate the nomination too! I like to think we are part of the same race, the human one-so why all the conflict? I've always believed our children are what we teach them-if they are spoonfed hate all their lives they grow up teaching their children the same. Sad state of affairs we deal with. I'm really glad you liked it-take care-Brenda

  • 8 years ago

    by Judy Sullivan

    So sad , but yet so true. Great writing Brenda. Look forward to reading more from you.

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much Judy! I appreciate your comments, take care-Brenda

  • 8 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judge Comment:

    This poem is a powerful Life Poem!

    It reads like a political rap/rant and written in a very tasteful way...

    You can feel the anger and sadness-

    The flow and rhythm is outstanding and with a poem such as this, It has to flow or it fails... broken lines kill the flow and Brenda shocked me this week! The flow was spot on!!

    I read this poem and I said, out loud "Damn"

    Scream it Woman!!

    The message speaks for itself,
    Hate is a plague within Society
    and it's killing souls of humanity.

    Brenda's closing lines tie this explosive poem together.. Wonderful write and well written!

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Andrea, Wow! Thank you so much! I'm blown away from your kind words! Coming from a writer such as yourself is high praise indeed-thank you again!

  • 8 years ago

    by Kips2.0

    This is just a message from the heart! Seems like a stream of water releasing itself heartily. I love this bit this most,

    "our children aren't born
    to hate
    we teach them hate
    with our words
    our actions
    against our fellow man
    we hate for their differences
    for how some-one looks
    their beliefs..."

    Keep them coming!

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much! It came to me just like that, it's sad to think our world is like this.

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    A desperate plea, I see this as, that needs to be heard across the world. None of us chose to be born within a particular border; none of us chose the color of our skin, or to be born rich or poor. We are all in this struggle together, and we will succeed in working together. The only thing, as you mention, I think holds us back -- is religion. A shame that something so positive and romantic is used degenerately.

    This poem utilizes your wonderful vocabulary, and flows easily in the reader's mind. Spectacular!

    5/5
    V/r
    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 8 years ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you Stephen for your thoughtful comments. It is sad we can't just be nice to each other. Generation after generation learning hate all over again, and for what?