Bear Truth

Niiiiccccceeeee! I never would have thought this write was about a teddy bear! Sweet! Well done-

Twas a beautiful poem, that left the reader in the dark until the very end -- which is a very ingenious idea! I loved it!

As for a poem title suggestion, I would give it the title of "A Tea Party With Your Old Best Friend" or something along those lines. I think the title "Bear Truth" would give away too much... or perhaps you could use the title "Bare Truth" as a play on bear/bare.

As for corrections on the poem, they are as follows:

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Why is it when I talk you cant hear me

I would suggest:
Why is it when I talk you can't hear me,
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Yet when you want to talk i have to listen

Suggestion:
yet when you want to talk, I have to listen?
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Until your eyes no longer glisten

Suggestion:
until your eyes no longer glisten.
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You never seem to be around

Suggestion:
you never seem to be around,
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But when you go to bed crying

Suggestion:
but when you go to bed crying
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I feel like I'm bound

Suggestion:
I feel like I'm bound?

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I'm there for your fun
Tea parties; and all

Suggestion:
I'm there for your fun,
tea parties and show and tell...
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Yet when you didn't need me
You didn't care if I fall.

Suggestion:
Yet when you didn't need me
you didn't care if I fell.
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I remember every word

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I remember every word.
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You confide in me for hours
Yet when your done with me

Suggestion:
You confide in me for hours,
yet when you're done with me
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My spot is exchanged for flowers

Suggestion:
my spot is exchanged for flowers.
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In front and centre

Suggestion:
-front and center-
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Reminding you of

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reminding you of
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Our fun times together

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our fun times together.
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I think you need to let me go

Suggestion:
I think you need to let me go;
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I feel like its time; I'm ready

Suggestion:
I feel like it's time; I'm ready
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To go to a new home

Suggestion:
to go to a new home
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Be a new little girls teddy.

Suggestion:
and be a new little girl's teddy.
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I took, as I usually do, artistic liberties. If you have a distinct syllabic pattern, I did not recognize it and some of my corrections may throw off any such pattern. Some were corrections and some were suggestions.

I do think this was wonderful, perhaps one of your best pieces! Keep up the strong writing.

Much love,
5/5
IdTakeABulletForYou

I really like the twist at the ending!

Might I suggest "Semblance of Normalcy" if you wanted something a bit heavy, or "Bursts of Bliss" if you wanted something a bi light? Not too sure, which way you're leaning regarding the title, lol.

N, I liked this ALOT!

How about time to go teddy or you're too old for me?
Em