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  • 8 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    This is perfect. And to the point. I like it

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Thanks USB :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Straight to the point. I like it :)

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank ya ma'am :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A very witty write. The title led me astray which I like in a senryu; it gave me no idea of the content that followed.

    SL

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you, good Sir :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Niiiiccccceeee ! Deceptively done-

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you ma'am:)

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    I don't get them either, but I like having to pack a punch into such a small space. Then I cheat anyway, by making triplets, quintuplets, strings, etc! Inquiring minds do want to know, but I doubt we ever will.

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Haha i did just that on my first one. Can't tell a decent story with just one

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    I think the clever part of your example of the Senryu form is the deliberate rebellion - leaving one syllable out of each line.

    A nice touch.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hmmm witty, Maher! Rebellion is the word...Lol. Loved it. :-)

    • 7 years ago

      by Maher

      Lol thanks Mel :)