Comments : Lost at Sea

  • 8 years ago

    by Precious Velasco

    Touching. Beautiful :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Maher

    I agree with Precious, it is quite beautiful and you've done well weaving the sadness in, especially in the last 4 verses, which were my favourite. I feel they are what bring the sadness out the most.

    Thank you for sharing your work with us all :)

    • 8 years ago

      by Little Silver Pen

      The last 4 verses are my favorite too. I can't believe this is my first poem. Seriously. My poems get worse as time goes on.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    A beautiful full of sadness and wonderful imagery.

    All the best, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by John Doe

    I agree with Precious and Maher you have indeed done a very good job in weaving the sadness in. Keep writing!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Shruti

    Hi Celeste,
    this is wonderful and the rhyme is so good.
    You penned down the sadness, grief so well in beautiful words.
    Nice. :)
    5/5
    ~S

    • 8 years ago

      by Little Silver Pen

      Thank you, Shruti. I love it how everyone seems to like this. Personally, the last 4 lines were my favorite.

      Mother, then why isn't he coming back?

  • 8 years ago

    by SnowdropsFall

    This is extremely good. Death is such a mystery to us when we are very young.

    • 8 years ago

      by Little Silver Pen

      It's the perspective of a 8 year old. I guess that's young.