Lost Lamb

by deeplydesturbed   Jul 12, 2016


Little lamb prancing.
Dancing in the big green fields
Oh No! Where's my mum?

Glossy, silky fur.
Where could she have gone today?
She was just right here..

"Mummy" he bleats loud.
She comes up behind him.."BOO!"
He has found his mum!

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  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Aww thanks for making me smile today.

    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Also, there is gender confusion in the last stanza. I perhaps misunderstood, but is the main sheep a male? If so, it would help to change "it" bleats to "he" bleats, and the last line needs to clarify which gender the main character is.

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Hahaha idiot me! :( god.. okay fixed ^_^
      thank you!

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Before the word "Bleats", I believe wit's supposed to be "it", not "is".

    Cute poem :-)

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

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