Comments : Lost Lamb

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Before the word "Bleats", I believe wit's supposed to be "it", not "is".

    Cute poem :-)

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Also, there is gender confusion in the last stanza. I perhaps misunderstood, but is the main sheep a male? If so, it would help to change "it" bleats to "he" bleats, and the last line needs to clarify which gender the main character is.

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Hahaha idiot me! :( god.. okay fixed ^_^
      thank you!

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Aww thanks for making me smile today.

    Em