Comments : Are Fairy Tails Real?

  • 8 years ago

    by ether

    "through waves of motorized metal shards"
    you've written a brilliant metaphor. the length is short and sweet with a simple but effective rhyme. well done.

    however i cannot get past two errors: over punctuation (one ! will do) and it is "fairy tale"*

    all the best.

    • 8 years ago

      by Invisibly Awesome

      I appreciate the critique :) & I shall look into the punctuation, however I meant to use the words "fairy tail" to show how far fetched the idea is (that a fairy has an actual tail) what a 'fairy tail' that would be? Yes ;) Thank you again for the praise with metaphor!

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This may be short but it's perfectly written.
    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Invisibly Awesome

      Thank you Em! It is a short poem, no doubt, but I put a lot of heart into it. & I think that is the top reason to write; to be able to fully express yourself. Thanks so much again for the plesent comment :)