I am impressed! exceptional rhyming while using great metaphors at the same time. this poem has a very powerful message to spread. overall, excellent job!

Wayne, this is fantastically rhymed and the flows so smoothly line by line and the message within it is truly inspiring and one that we should all take note of because in life we can control nothing I feel and though it is probably clichéd everything happens for a reason.

1: It's difficult to feel the weight of the world on our shoulders but what makes it much more difficult is feeling alone when doing so. A friend in these situations goes a long way.

2: Yes, when we are in the dark hole it's hard to escape it but somehow, some way we do and for awhile we do feel exhausted fighting what seems like a never ending battle but as I said we escape for a little especially with support off family and friends.

3: Agreed we have to look out for number one for a change and if that means holding people at arms length then so be it.

4: I liked these lines because they hold great advice, we should all take what is giving to us big or small.

Fantastic write, Em