Fighting for life

by deeplydesturbed   Aug 10, 2016


A voice that cries and wings that wildly beat,
You cannot hope to know until you try,
A dwindling world below your worn out feet,
The furious wind lifts you far and high.

Your life is small; the endless sky is vast,
Take a flaming chance and roll the dice,
Above grey clouds you'll soar in flight at last,
The life before you is your paradise.

All that you want and need is called a sin,
The crumbs of love locked away in a cage,
Nobody sees the heart shining within,
The crumbs of love locked away in a cage.

Far over tall mountain peaks of snow-white,
Fly high and don't surrender in your fight.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    N, a very strong write! It shows a lot of growth and empowerment which is wonderful! You go girl! Well done-

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    A very powerful, moving piece.

    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Naomi,

    Your poetry is quite literally getting better and more accomplished by the day; you have a real flair for rhyme in general.

    SL

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thank you - i have decided im starting to fight back!! :)
      Id love to see myself a year from now. And compare :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Belle

    "A dwindling world below your worn out feet"

    This line hit home. It's how I feel about the world I live in today. I'm worn out from walking a meaningless existence.

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    A truly stunning piece, I see your style is evolving beautifully. Proud of you! :)

    My favorite line was definitely: "The life before you is your paradise." Sums up everything I neglect every day of my life.

    5/5
    Much love,
    IdTakeaBulletForYou

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thank you! :)
      I'm glad you enjoyed :)

      obviously it is not quite there yet! but I am learning (with a LOT of help!)

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      I dont know why it posted twice LOL :) but ty

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