Comments : Security surrounds me

  • 8 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    The last line is missing a syllable, if you're going for a Senryu, but other than that I definitely am in need of arms wrapped around me after the nightmares I endured last night. Hope you get to sleep tonight, darling!

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 8 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      For some mindless half awake reason i counted secure as 3 syllabals =/ its fixed now. And middnight and no sleep. Lol im trying again now! Seems we all need a cuddle

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    N, I believe this is truly personal for you and many of us here on P&Qs could relate to it right now as I guess we could all use a hug.
    All the best, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    N, I just love this-we all could use a big hug a time and again-hugs to you! Brenda

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Naomi

    This is a lovely little senryu and yes, 'secure' has two syllables. 'fire', 'liar' ,'dire' etc are all examples of tricky words - one syllable but sound like two.

    SL