Comments : Boy in Blue Bandages

  • 8 years ago

    by Everlasting

    It seems many people lack maturity.

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Oh my heart... this is why we need to raise awareness. I think all of us, at some point, have felt overwhelmed before by all the injustices and abuse in this world. Maybe that's just our humanness or ignorance or fear to act... it can be all too easy I believe, to fall into the trap of feeling powerless, like they're too many "victims" to help.

    A sad, gut-wrenching write. But this needed to be said, so thank you for writing this, Larry <3

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is filled with a sadness and awareness needs to be greater because too many children have died from abuse.
    All the best, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Larry, congratulations on your win, well deserving. It's a sad state of affairs in these days of real time and social media that so many children continue to be abused. As you stated, perhaps we should wrap up all these kids and place them along the road to get people to realize how big this problem really is. Powerful write, well done Larry.

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations Larry. I hope this raises awareness for this terrible issue.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Congratulations on a well deserved win

  • 8 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Em, Brenda & Michael
    Thank you each one!

    make the children safe!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Congratulations on this excellent and important write, Larry and for the win.

    SL

  • 8 years ago

    by Hellon

    I didn't read this poem when you posted it at first because the title seemed too similar to the movie Boy in the Blue Striped Pyjamas but..now that it's won I can see why it did. I think the portrayal of the fact that most just shrug their shoulders just stood out to me...why do people still continue to do that?

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    A heart wrenching situation which takes place in every country and some are just swept away without a care.

    Perhaps if the children
    were encircled instead
    in bright blue bandages
    and set along the road
    pitiful and helpless
    passersby would get it.

    ^^Sometimes actual facts must be displayed for action to take place that seems to be the only way for the others to stand up against this kind of abuse.

    Another thing I noticed about this poem is that it is very simply and matter of fact-ly been written with subtle rhymes. So it does not focus on just how well this message has been put forward but how well it grabs the reader to take that minute to feel for these kids.

    You'd hear then
    a momentary sigh;
    "Oh well, what can be done?
    I mean, there's just so many"
    and they, each and every,
    will drive on by.

    ^^Yeah its this attitude that gives support and encouragement for the abusers to go on. If one revolts others will follow suit.

    One thing-with the last two lines I had to read and re-read for it was not making sense..then it did but I still feel there could have been an added line or word but then again the structure of this poem will get disrupted.

    and they, each and every

    ^^maybe: and they, each and every one will sound better of make it/me understand then again its just a suggestion.

    All in all a well deserved write, Congrats on the Win :)

  • 8 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Ugh, this poem made my heart hurt. I think about this all the time... a person or people know something bad - really bad - is going on, but they choose to ignore it. They pretend it isn't there. They leave the mess for someone else to clean up. Sometimes there isn't someone else. The last stanza is what really gets me. I know too many people who are like this. Sigh and drive on by.
    Powerful poem. Important message. Thank you for bringing attention to this painful reality.

  • 8 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Sorry for the belated congratulations and comment but things have been so hectic recently this is the first opportunity I have had. Well done on a very well deserved win. A truly wonderful poem
    Milly x

  • 8 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    If it weren't for the note at the bottom of the piece I would say that this write can be seen as a symbol and awareness for quite a few different occasions, but I am glad for the note and the way it clarifies the meaning for this specific piece by the author. This piece really stands out for its simplicity wrapped contemplation, we all write "the world would be better if" type of pieces but this one takes that to a more actualized level because it is explaining not only where we are going wrong but how we got to this point as well. The line about lacy blue ribbons is definitely something I would not have expected - while children are delicate (like the image of lace suggests) the topic at hand does not come across as having the same... particularities; and that truly caught my attention as showing the author's unique way with words as well as directing their intentions in a manner of informing the reader where they stand on this issue. As heartbreaking as this piece is, it is also eye opening.