Our first dance

by Dado   Aug 13, 2016


Your arms securely wrapped around my waist
my hands gently placed upon your shoulders
the music is soft and the people are loud
and all we can hear is our heavy breath sounds
you pull back and suddenly grab me closer
am leaning now on your chest
you come down and put my head to rest
my ears tightly pressed against your heart
you whisper
love
i ll always be there
my heart skips a beat or two my knees grow weaker
intoxicated by the smell of love that lingers in the air
embraced in your arms so tight
your delicate fingers run through my hair
i let out a deep breath in despair
you cup my face as you attentively look deep into my eyes
you lure me in closer and closer and with no regards to everyone and everything around
you press your lips tenderly against mine
and when i gasp for air
i feel you end it with the widest smile .....

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  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is such a beautiful telling story of intimacy. I could picture being the one dancing and sharing that precious moment.

    I do feel that the extra ',' need deleting as they are a bit off putting to a wonderful, smooth flowing piece.
    All the best. Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    As Mr Darcy points out, there are a couple of typos throughout this piece but that doesn't detract from the warmth and love you have managed to convey with this excellent write.

    Well done,

    SL

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    This is such a sweet telling of a tender moment. It's amazing how in a crowded room two people can feel exclusively alone; all external stimulus muted as love focuses it's magic.

    You may have a couple of typos? The word 'breathe' mat need the 'e' removing to make 'breath'

    Great work.

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 7 years ago

      by Dado

      Took care of the typos
      Thank you for pointing them out

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